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My youthful fingers
slip into the soft soil
of earth’s thick and damp hair,
trembling with the
quaking ground
that arrested my
dreaming slumber.

The warm grass
barrages my night gown
with chilling dew
projectiles
as my eyes press
the fading moonlit form.

Her scales shimmer
reflecting the stars
with a silvery purple hue
between the ricocheting breaths
that reverberate along the hillside.

Fear and awe sweat from my body
as she shakes the frail palms of death
from their tightening hold around
her muscular neck
as would a horse might a gnat.

Barbels plow veins
along the ground until
I feel her heated breath
encircling the insignificant
strands of my straw brown hair.

Smirking eyes lock into mine
as she lifts to her imposing height.
She rakes the ground while the
desperate heart thumps
slow to an instant.

The heavens contort
and shred themselves apart
as her soul presses in on my own.
The sands grow age as mountains
and ocean waves no longer
see me drift  by
in the blink of the eye
as I spread my soft
leathery wings
and fly.
©2006-2009 =Infrunitas
:iconinfrunitas:

Author's Comments

This piece is long overdue. I've played with it over and over again until these tumbling words became something with some sort of coherence. So I beseech you to enjoy the lighthearted mood and let it feel you with a joy I wish could have been part of my childhood experience.

Insenescence-The process of becoming old

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:iconelf-buttercup:
Very nice indeed, I love the first and last stanzas especially. You are a talent. :)

--
Well that was unexpected..

:heart: Will never forget you :pumpkin: :heart:
:iconinfrunitas:
Many thanks, Naya. I was a bit fearful about letting this one out. This piece I struggled with for about a month until I really pushed it {I feel it a few times in the details}. But we all have those moments, neh?

--
To twist one purest cause
Into an honest verse,
Itself, a call to angels.
The saddened lips of song that
Kiss away our innocence
From the vile mundane.
~justb
:iconelf-buttercup:
You're always welcome, Ty :)

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Well that was unexpected..

:heart: Will never forget you :pumpkin: :heart:
:iconletterbomber-223:
I love how this is expressed, I wouldn't have guessed it was about aging, to be honest.

'Smirking eyes lock into mine
as she lifts to her imposing height.
She rakes the ground while the
desperate heart thumps
slow to an instant.'

nice.

--
scrawled
All
Day
I
Dream
About
Screaming till my lungs fall out and my blood stains your smile.
:icondarkvenom:
whoa, thats amazing...

Theres at least two tones this can be read in too, i like.

At first i found the structure to be too broken up, but reading further i found it rather suits the piece, but even so... i cant decide on that one...

Anyway, wicked piece, beautiful :)
:iconymotea:
Wow, the describtions pulled me right in! I particularly liked the line, "Fear and awe sweat from my body". An amazing way to illustrate the aura of the narrator's feelings. Wonderful piece!
:iconinfrunitas:
*Grin* Splendid compliment! Many thanks on your +faves and in depth reads. It truly means the world to me.

In this piece, I did my best to set the scene where his emotions amplified the actions of the two armies. The hardest part was keeping them as mere natural forces.

--
To twist one purest cause
Into an honest verse,
Itself, a call to angels.
The saddened lips of song that
Kiss away our innocence
From the vile mundane.
~justb
:iconelvirasbane:
"as my eyes press
the fading moonlit form."

simple, sweet and wistful.

the poem is beautiful...

*shakes head to detach from dream*

:applause:

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:w00t:

When the going gets good, the good bites you on the ass.

:kitty:
:iconinfrunitas:
You, sir, hit it right on the mark. Thx for reading it bro. Haven't heard from you in a while. You holding up ok?

--
To twist one purest cause
Into an honest verse,
Itself, a call to angels.
The saddened lips of song that
Kiss away our innocence
From the vile mundane.
~justb

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